Jasmine Hart

I liked this. The first stanza is very good and I like the whole "backspace" thing, but I'd get rid of the last line here as it's too colloquial and ...

I liked this. I'd add capital letters and add punctuation. I like the idea of the heart having wings and the rhyming scheme worked well.

This is cute. I'd make the first letter capital, and add a comma after "popular." I'd chaneg "to" to "by" as I think it sounds better. I'd add a comma ...

I agree with what's been said already. You handled the rhyming very well, but, honestly, I think it took from your piece as a whole as you were restricted by ...

I liked this. You expressed yourself beautifully. Firstly,"tale" should be "tales." I'd omit "those" before "cliches" as I think it makes the line too long. I'd also change "heart goes" ...

I loved the taste of his disregard in the morning; It sailed through my being, leaving its hooks To ensure that I ignored every warning No matter how much of ...

ok...let me think. Elizabeth has gone for a bath. Abigail has left the house, Julian has gone after Abigail, and Gregory is in the house somewhere. Elizabeth and Gregory seem ...

Hi! Welcome! Hope you like it here. What are you working on at the moment? Feel free to PM if you have any questions. Jas

I really like this Kit. Actually, strike that, like isn't strong enough, I love it. Overall, I think the second version is better, but I'd leave in teh part about ...

Yay, Christmasness! Merry Christmas dudes. :D

Sorry I'm neglecting this so badly... Abigail I wasn’t quite sure what sort of madness had seized me, but I was sure that it would be to my detriment. What ...

I’m not entirely sure why it is that people insist that success smells sweet. What I must rank as my greatest success did not smell sweet. It smelt of salted ...

Jasmine smiles. "Thanks very much!" She drags over two chairs so that herself and InYourMindI'mThere can reach, and then fishes some sellotape out of her bag and cuts some off, ...

Hi Phoebe.I'm Jasmine, or Jas, depending on how quickly you/I want to type. Welcome to YWS. Hope you like it here! Looking forward to reading your stuff.Feel free to PM ...

Ooops. I totally forgot about this. Sharon I punched a couple of buttons on the phone with more force than was neccessary. Tim's call was cut off before he could ...